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Topic: Lyrics and Rhymes |
Paul Graupp
From:
Macon Ga USA
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Posted 13 Sep 2002 3:59 pm |
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I was explaining to a grandchild how lines in a song are supposed to rhyme. The question came up: Why only two lines in rhyme, why not three or four ?? Well, I thought of only one three liner from an old Temptations song:
You must realize
When that lovely flame dies
Smoke gets in your eyes.
Could anyone give a four liner or perhaps even some more three liners ? Thank You !!
Regards, Paul |
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Earnest Bovine
From:
Los Angeles CA USA
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Posted 13 Sep 2002 6:35 pm
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I got a feeling on my wrist called a watch
I got a feeling in my belly called scotch
I got a feeling between my legs called a crotch
So f-ing what!
(comp Jeffrey Comanor) |
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Earnest Bovine
From:
Los Angeles CA USA
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Posted 13 Sep 2002 8:32 pm
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I got a feeling in my lungs called smoke
I got a feeling in my nose called coke
I got a feeling in my wallet called broke
So f-ing what! |
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Stephen Gambrell
From:
Over there
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Posted 13 Sep 2002 9:14 pm
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If I could write in rhyme
I'd be like Earnest Bovine
My dream, herein defined,
Would be Boone's Farm wine. |
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Earnest Bovine
From:
Los Angeles CA USA
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Posted 13 Sep 2002 9:35 pm
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| Jeffrey Comanor wrote those lyrics, which are so memorable that I can still recall them after hearing the song only once, at Tampa Stadium on July 4 1976, where J.C. sang these and about a dozen more equally inspired verses before a phalanx of fat cops named Buford stormed the stage, interrupted the song, and carted his sorry ass off to jail for saying the F-word on a giant PA system where a hundred thousand patriotic young people were celebrating Bicentennial Day by getting high and getting naked. |
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Ian Finlay
From:
Kenton, UK
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Posted 16 Sep 2002 8:10 am
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How about the chorus to "shake rattle & roll"?
Shake Rattle and Roll
Shake Rattle and Roll
Shake Rattle and Roll
Shake Rattle and Roll
You won't do nuthin' to save your doggone soul
Does that count? B-) |
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R. L. Jones
From:
Lake Charles, Louisiana, USA
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Posted 16 Sep 2002 9:35 am
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I always thought most country songs -ballads had 4 lines per verse and chorus,
"There`s a picture ,that I carry
One we made some time ago,
when they ask who`s in the picture with you
I say , just someone I used to know
Just someone I used to run around with,
Just a flame thats lost it`s glow
I dont tell them how lost I am without you
I say, just someone I used to know. |
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R. L. Jones
From:
Lake Charles, Louisiana, USA
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Posted 16 Sep 2002 9:58 am
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In dreams of yesterday, I wandered
back to my little cabin door
I strolled by the old rock garden
seen familiar scenes once more
I heard the organ softly playing
the music came so soft and low
Then I heard my mother softly singing
As she oft done so long ago
R. L. |
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Paul Graupp
From:
Macon Ga USA
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Posted 16 Sep 2002 1:37 pm
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Sorry Guys !! I posted this and then forgot about it !!
Earnest: I'm sure JC only offended the authorities !!
Ian: Yes !! and No !! 
R.L. I was trying to find 3 or 4 lines togeather that all rhymed with each other like the Smoke Gets In Your Eyes song.
Regards, Paul   |
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R. L. Jones
From:
Lake Charles, Louisiana, USA
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Posted 19 Sep 2002 6:26 pm
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It`s O. K. Paul I knew what you were looking for, I just wantedto change the tone ,a little.
Amazing Grace has two liner rhymes I cant think of any three line rhymes.
Lot of old songs at one time did that
R.L. |
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R. L. Jones
From:
Lake Charles, Louisiana, USA
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Posted 19 Sep 2002 7:25 pm
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" MY HAPPINESS",
Evenlng shadows make me Blue
When each weary day is through
How I long to be with You
My happiness
Every day I reminess
dreaming of your tender kiss
????????????????????????
My happiness
Anyway this song does have what you`re looking for |
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Paul Graupp
From:
Macon Ga USA
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Posted 20 Sep 2002 10:51 am
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YES ! YES !! That missing line is some thing about .....how I miss. That is what I was looking for but couldn't conjur it up !!  
Regards, Paul |
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Lem Smith
From:
Long Beach, MS
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Posted 20 Sep 2002 12:16 pm
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Paul,
Several years ago, Cal Smith had a song out entitled, "Destination Atlanta, GA" and parts went something like this...
I'll tell the man at the station,
I want a one way reservation,
and make my destination,
Atlanta, GA.
also
I'll draw the pay that I've got comin'
I'll hit the station runnin'
Get ready for all the fun in,
Atlanta, GA.
and
I'll call down to the station,
for ticket information,
Confirm my reservation,
for Atlanta, GA.
Sounds like this might possibly fit what you're looking for also.
Lem
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Bob Blair
From:
Edmonton, Alberta, Canada
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Posted 20 Sep 2002 6:15 pm
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| Inspired as I am by Bovine's tale, I'm still working on coming up with a few words that ryhme with "Buford". |
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Paul Graupp
From:
Macon Ga USA
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Posted 20 Sep 2002 6:46 pm
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Lem: You got me to thinkin':: Cal Smith....
Where'd you come from country bumpkin'
Fresh as dew out on the pumpkin
I've seen a lot but man you're somethin'
Where'd you come from country bumpkin'
I think I've found my four liner.
And while I'm at it; my new grandson would fit a verse in that song as well. He sure is
somethin' special to me !!
Regards, Paul |
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R. L. Jones
From:
Lake Charles, Louisiana, USA
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Posted 21 Sep 2002 6:22 pm
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More My Happiness
Whether Sky`s are Grey or Blue
Anny place on earth will do
Just as long as I`mwith You
My Happiness |
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Jim Florence
From:
wilburton, Ok. US * R.I.P.
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Posted 24 Sep 2002 9:39 am
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| My Wife says the missing line is "Allways thinking how I miss" I think she's right. Since the song is not classic "Country" I didn't commit it to memory. |
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R. L. Jones
From:
Lake Charles, Louisiana, USA
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Posted 24 Sep 2002 11:34 am
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Jim , your wife i correct on that line .
The wife of 58 yrs. And I got to singing the parts of the old song we recalled, and somehow it allcame back to us
Evening shadows make me blue
when each weary day is through
How I long to be with you
My happiness
Every day I reminise
Dreaming of your tender kiss
Always thinking how I miss
My happiness
A million tears it seems
have gone by since we shared our dreams
But I`ll hold you again
There`ll be no blue memories then
Whether skys are grey or blue
Any place on earth will do
Just as long as I have you
My happiness
R. L. |
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Paul Graupp
From:
Macon Ga USA
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Posted 24 Sep 2002 12:43 pm
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I went to Cowpie for those lyrics but couldn't turn them up for some reason or other. As I read (sang) through your post, I knew each word was correct as I now remember them. Thank You ! A whole song based (except for the chorus...) on three line rhymes.
Regards, Paul |
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anewcomb
From:
Astoria NY
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Posted 25 Sep 2002 11:05 am
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this thread sent me to cowpie to check Setting the Woods on Fire by Hank Williams:
C
Comb your hair and paint and powder
F
You act proud and I'll act prouder
G
You sing loud and I'll sing louder
G
Tonight we're setting the woods on fire
C
You my gal and I'm your feller
F
Dress up in your frock of yeller
G
I'll look swell but you'll look sweller
G C
Setting the woods on fire
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Andy Newcomb a beginner on the steel guitar
Williams Keyless S-10, Rickenbacher Model 59
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R. L. Jones
From:
Lake Charles, Louisiana, USA
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Posted 25 Sep 2002 7:11 pm
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Hey Andy Nice going; never thought of that one . There`s a lot of old songs with that three line rhymes, but just trying to think them up;;
R. L. |
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Jim Florence
From:
wilburton, Ok. US * R.I.P.
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Posted 25 Sep 2002 9:07 pm
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You've got to -----
Accentuate the positive
eliminate the negative
and latch on to the affirmative
don't mess with mr. in between
Jim |
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